IELTS Writing Tip
- One sentence for the introduction.
- Two sentences using superlatives.
- A sentence with a comparison. Make comparisons where relevant.
- A sentence grouping two data points to show similarity (for example, you might include a brief description showing a gradual decrease in two different areas).
- A sentence noting an exception to an overall trend.
- A sentence describing some data in an advanced manner, using complex sentence structure.
- A sentence describing relevant data using simple structure.
- Two sentences for summary and conclusion.
Avoid listing every single data point; instead use your own words to describe the key information from the chart/graph.
Avoid mixing formats: for example, don't mix decimals with estimations in the same sentence.
Check whether there is a date on the bar chart - you may need to use the past tense.
Make note of general trends, particularly upward or downward trends that can be highlighted in your own words.
After you have successfully written out your description with all of the information you want to include, go over it and replace some simpler words with more academic vocabulary – this will help you achieve a high score. For example, try replacing "big" with "most significant".
Check that your text is error-free. Review carefully to see if all your sentences are grammatically correct.
Make sure that the data you have described is correct - that you have not made a mistake with a category or labels.
Review for the correct use of connectors and linking words.
Practise with different bar graphs/pie charts to improve especially with a range of values (percentages, kilos, miles, dollars).
Review the superlatives - highest, lowest, most expensive, biggest difference - these are essential if you want to effectively describe bar charts.
The fastest way to improve is to get feedback on your work. You can also check another model bar graph answer for comparison.
Don't forget to check your word count. Make sure your piece is another too brief nor too wordy and detailed.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Write at least 150 words.
Bar Chart 3
ReplyDeleteThe graphic shows the number of foreign students studying in four English-speaking countries: United States of America, United Kingdom, Australia, Canada in 2004 and 2012, while the table shows foreign students as a percentage of total student numbers in the countries.
All indicators show an upwardtrend, percentages in the table is increasing. The United States shows the most volatility, where the number of international students increased from 175,000 in 2004 to 245,000 in 2012. In England and Australia, the indicators of students from other countries changed approximately the same: from 120,000 in 2004 to almost 200,000 in 2012. Canada had a significantly lower number of foreign students than in the other countries: with about 41,000 in 2004 and approximately 61,000 in 2012.
Table data shows an increase in each percentage, except for the United States of America. The highest increase in the percentage of overseas students was in Australia, where in 2012 the percentage was 24% of total student numbers. The percentage of international students in the US has remained stable at 2% in 2004 and in 2012, which is the lowest in the table.
The graphics presents the amount of data about The USA, The UK, Australian and Canadian students in the 2004 and 2012. At the same time, the table shows the ratio of international students to all students in general for the same years.
ReplyDeleteWe can notice that all indicators show an upward trend, especially if we talk about the USA: compared to 2004 and 180 thousand foreign students, the numbers in 2012 rose to 60 thousand, the numbers of students approached 250 thousand (approximately 240 thousand). The figures in the UK were also impressive. In 2004 the numbers were slightly above 100 thousand, namely 120. However in 2012 there was a remarkable increase with the total number of foreign students reaching 195 thousand. The surge of 75 thousand in 8 years is the highest according to the chart. Australia and Canada had gradually rise, started with 120 and 40 thousand in 2004 and ended with 170 and 60 thousand in 2012 respectively.
The table shows a dramatically growth in every country except the USA (the 2% rate in 2004 remained the same in 2012). The UK showed slight increase from 9% to 13%. Australia stood out and presented the highest growth of 5%: from 19% to 24%. And finally, Canada showed a weak growth of 2% from 5% to 7%.
By Diana
Good job! Your essay shows a clear progression of ideas and logical organisation. You effectively use comparison words to link information and make relationships clear.
Deletehad a gradual rise, showed a slight increase. The surge of 75 thousand in 8 years was the highest according to the chart.
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