Monday, March 10, 2025

IELTS Writing Task 2: Problem/Solution Essay 1

 

Problem / Solution Essay 1

Some people think that children nowadays are spending an excessive amount of time watching TV or using a computer or mobile phone.

Describe some of the_problems that too much screen time can have for children, and what can be done to tackle them.

  • You should spend about 40 minutes on this task to write at least 250 words. 

The topic of this essay is about the amount of time children spend using screens (TV, computer, mobile phones).

By looking at the instruction words, we can see this question also asks for problems and solutions in the plural form (although remember it is ok to focus on a single problem and solution in the exam).


Notes   Producing ideas for your answer

Problems:

  • Childhood obesity
  • Addiction
  • Mental health issues
  • Targeted junk food adverts

Solutions:
  • Government incentives for active children
  • Limited screen time imposed by parents
  • Lessons to educate children on the dangers of too much screen time
  • Restrictions on adverts at certain times

       Introduction

       There are three key things to include in your  problem/solution introduction:

      •  Paraphrase the given IELTS statement and   question
      •  State the problem/cause/solution
      •  State what your essay will do

      To successfully paraphrase the statement, you can use synonyms, change the word order or change the word class (e.g from a noun to an adjective). The tricky part is making sure you keep the meaning of the statement the same. 


      IELTS Statement: 

      Some people think that children nowadays are spending an excessive amount of time watching TV or using a computer or mobile phone.
      Describe some of the problems that too much screen time can have for children, and what can be done to tackle them.

      Paraphrased Statement:

      Nowadays, governments and health experts around the world  have become increasingly  concerned about the general health of children. They are particularly worried about problems caused by too much time spent in front of a TV, computer or mobile.


      You can also briefly state what your essay will do using an outline statement. Here's an example sentence:

      This essay will look at these problems in more detail and propose some solutions.

      Main Body

      For each problem or cause you write about, you should create a topic sentence which introduces each main idea.

      Here are some possible ways you could structure your topic sentences.


      • One major problem connected to is..
      • Another issue is that...
      • A final problem is the...
      • One cause of _____ is ..
      • One reason for _____ is ...
      • A further way to explain ________ is ...
      •  One contributing factor to _________ is...

      You could also use the structure that + a clause. 

      Here are some examples:

      One major problem connected to childrens' health is lack of exercise.

      Another issue is that there are a large amount of junk food advertisements on television aimed at children.

      As well as language for problems, you will also need to introduce solutions to these problems. Even though the topic of your essay will be different, you can learn language chunks/sentence starters to do this. 

      Take a look at these examples:

      • To deal with this problem,_________ could ....
      • The way forward might be for ______ to ...
      • The solution is for people to .... 
      • In order to solve this issue, _____ should ......
      When you provide a solution, it is a good idea to keep the actor of the sentence more general, for example:
      • The government
      • Schools
      • Parents
      You can also learn lexical chunks related to solutions to common problems. Here are just a few suggestions for the model answer:
      • The government could bring in a law to ban junk food advertising.
      • The government could allocate more money to healthy eating campaigns.
      • Parents could set aside time in the day to do activities as a family away from screens.
      • Schools could employ more physical education teachers to improve students' fitness levels.
      Body Paragraph 1:

      One major problem connected to childrens' health is lack of exercise: in recent years, the amount of time children spend being sedentary in front of a screen has increased drastically, and as a result, childrens' fitness levels have plummeted. This is a significant problem in the USA, for example, where children spend an increasing amount of time watching a TV screen. To try and solve this problem, governments should implement incentives for children that spend more time being active, such as giving vouchers for sport equipment or free tickets to sporting events.

      Body Paragraph 2:

      Another issue is that there are a large amount of junk food advertisements on television aimed at children. This means that children are being targeted to buy unhealthy junk food and processed meals which can lead to weight and Paragraph other health problems due to the high amounts of fat and sugar in the food. The answer could be for the government to ban these adverts at certain times of the day. If they did this, children would not be subjected to these unhealthy marketing tactics.


      Conclusion 

      Always make your conclusion easy to identify for the examiner by starting with:

      • In conclusion,...
      • To conclude,...
      • To sum up,...
      • In summary,...



      Now you will need to paraphrase (again) what you have written for your introduction in your own words. Compare out model answer introduction and conclusion:


      Introduction

      Nowadays, governments and health experts around the world have become increasingly concerned about the general health of children. They are particularly worried about problems caused by too much time spent in front of a TV, computer or mobile. This essay will look at these problems in more detail and propose some solutions.

      Conclusion

      To sum up, there is no doubt that the problem of too much screen time is becoming increasingly serious for the youth of today.Unless action is taken urgently, these problems will only intensify. My opinion is that responsibility for reducing the amount of time in front of a screen lies mainly with the government, but also with the parents.

        

      You can also include the following points in your conclusion (it is not necessary to

      include all the points):

      • State the seriousness of the problem (we've used the phrase increasingly serious)
      • Suggest who you think should solve the problem (we've gone with a balance between the government and parents)
      • Make suggestions about what to do in the future (we've kept this general: 'reducing the amount of screen time')
      • State what might happen if nothing is done to solve the problem (again, we've kept this general to reduce the word count: 'these problems will only intensify')


      Problem Solution Sample Essay

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      3 comments:

      1. Nowadays humanity guess that kids passing a vast of time sitting a front of TV or, using a computer of mobile. In modern world children have some kind of addiction to gadgets that lead to mental illness and that is a huge trouble for future generations. There is a several options for solving this issue that the government offers such as limited screen time controlling by parents and lessons to educate kids on the dangerous of too much screen time. This essay will look at these problem in more detail and propose some solutions.

        One major problem connected to youngster’s health is mental issues that arise through appliance addiction. Spending an immense amount of time on the phone, laptop or in front of TV, the child stops communicating with other adolescents, which is why in the future he may have troubles with communication and anxiety. This is a significant problem for the modern world: looking at the latest generation, called “alphas” we can see a tendency towards detachment and difficulties with self acceptance due to lack of friends. To try and solve this, governments should provide more opportunities for toddlers to develop verbal skills with their peers. Moreover, parents should monitor how much time their youngster waits watching the feed, limiting it, and taking about the negative consequences of screen addiction.

        In conclusion, there is no doubt that gadget addiction is present in today’s young society and causes a lot of harm. There are certain ways to solve this situation, but I believe that the government and parents need to pay even more attention to those who we are raising.

        By Diana

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        1. The essay adequately addresses the prompt by outlining problems associated with excessive screen time and suggesting solutions. The response is well-structured and presents a clear position. Further development of ideas and supporting evidence would enhance the response. You should pay more attention to the usage of Present Simple for the 3rd person singular. Commas are obligatory after introductory words at the beginning of the sentences, and before "and" when we use synonyms in the sentence.

          Nowadays, humanity guesses that kids kill a vast amount of time sitting in front of TV or, using a computer or a mobile device. In the modern world, children have some kind of addiction to gadgets that leads to mental illness, and this is huge trouble for future generations. There are several options for solving this issue that the government offers, such as limiting screen time controlled by parents and lessons to educate teenagers on the dangerous consequences of too much screen time. This essay will look at this problem in more detail and propose some solutions.
          One major problem connected to youngsters' health is mental issues that arise through appliance addiction. Spending an immense amount of time on the phone, laptop, or in front of TV, the child stops communicating with other adolescents; therefore, in the future, he or she may have trouble with communication and anxiety. This is a significant obstacle for the modern world: looking at the latest generation, called "alphas," we can see a tendency toward detachment and difficulties with self-acceptance due to the lack of friends. To try and solve this hardship, governments should provide more opportunities for toddlers to develop verbal skills with their peers. Moreover, parents should monitor how much time their youngsters spend watching newsfeed, limiting it, and talking about the negative consequences of screen addiction.
          In conclusion, there is no doubt that gadget addiction exists in today's young society and causes a lot of harm. There are certain ways to find the solution to this situation, but I believe that the government and parents need to pay even more attention to those whom we are raising.

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        2. This is the essay on a given topic with improved naturalness:

          In today's world, it is widely recognized that children spend a significant amount of time sitting in front of screens, whether through television, computers, or mobile devices. This modern-day gadget addiction among children can lead to mental health issues, posing a serious challenge for future generations. To address this concern, the government has proposed various solutions, such as encouraging parents to limit screen time and offering educational programs to teach teenagers about the dangers of excessive screen use. This essay will explore this problem in greater detail and suggest potential solutions.
          One of the primary health issues linked to young people today is the mental health problems that arise from excessive screen time. When children dedicate large portions of their day to using phones, laptops, or watching television, they often miss out on valuable social interactions with their peers. This lack of communication can lead to difficulties with social skills and increased anxiety later in life. This challenge is particularly evident in the latest generation, often referred to as 'Alphas,' who are exhibiting signs of social detachment and struggles with self-acceptance due to insufficient friendships. To mitigate this issue, governments should focus on providing more opportunities for young children to develop verbal skills through interaction with their peers. Additionally, parents should take an active role in monitoring their children's screen time, setting limits, and discussing the negative impact of screen addiction.
          In conclusion, it is clear that gadget addiction is a pressing issue among today's youth and has substantial harmful effects. While there are several strategies to address this situation, I believe that both the government and parents need to be more vigilant and proactive in supporting the healthy development of the children we are raising.

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