Question 1 Model Answer
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year
between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do
this.
Advantages
1) Opportunity to find a job and save money - Expensive education
2) Get some experience – solidify your goals to get a more realistic idea of your future career.
Disadvantages:
1) You might find your break too interesting/distracting and end up not wanting to go back into formal education.
2) Your study skills may have diminished, making it harder for you to adjust to life in schooling.
Introduction
Sentence 1 -
paraphrase the question (restate the problem)
Some students are suggested to take a break from schooling before entering college, but the issue also has some negative effect. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the problem and provide a logical conclusion.
Body paragraph 1 - advantages
Sentence 1 - state 1st main advantage:
One of the main advantages of taking a gap year is an opportunity to find a temporary job and save some finances to complete education.
Sentences 2-4 - explain the first advantage + give an example (if possible):
Firstly, nowadays education is expected to be very expensive and not everybody could afford that. This way, by earning money students would get a chance to cover some costs for a degree without getting in debts while studying. The Times recently reported that the average student at a UK university requires over $12,000 per annum just to survive and many drop out because they do not manage to pay.
Sentences 5-7 - explain the second advantage + give an example (if possible) or supported detail:
Secondly, being involved in work activities is a good possibility to gain valuable skills and experience in certain fields. This chance would be significantly reasonable for solidifying one’s goals to get a more realistic idea of the future career. Moreover, new practice and knowledge would help identify a student’s major while schooling.
Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
Sentence 1 - state 1st main disadvantage + give an example (if possible) or supported detail:
However, taking a break from schooling has some major disadvantages. Firstly, one might find the break too interesting/distracting, and end up not wanting to go back into formal education. Many students appreciate their independent lifetime full of travelling and new experiences so much that often have a hard time to resume schooling. In this case, one would lose a chance to get a degree and build a career.
Sentence 2 - state 2nd main disadvantage + give an example (if possible) or supported detail
Secondly, study skills may have diminished, making it harder for young people to adjust to life in education. According to research/statistics, students who took a year off after high school get lower marks than the ones who embarked on college after finishing school.
Conclusion
Sentences 1-2 - briefly restate the advantages and disadvantages.
To conclude, even though a year’s break is a good possibility to save finances and gain experience, it still can negatively impact on education by weakening students’ learning skills and their yearning to complete a degree.
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.
Some students are suggested to take a break from schooling before entering college, but the issue also has some negative effect. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the problem and provide a logical conclusion.
One of the main advantages of taking a gap year is an opportunity to find a temporary job and save some finances to complete education. Firstly, nowadays education is expected to be very expensive and not everybody could afford that. This way, by earning money students would get a chance to cover some costs for a degree without getting in debts while studying. The Times recently reported that the average student at a UK university requires over $12,000 per annum just to survive and many drop out because they do not manage to pay. Secondly, being involved in work activities is a good possibility to gain valuable skills and experience in certain fields. This chance would be significantly reasonable for solidifying one’s goals to get a more realistic idea of the future career. Moreover, new practice and knowledge would help identify a student’s major while schooling.
However, taking a break from schooling has some major disadvantages. Firstly, one might find the break too interesting/distracting, and end up not wanting to go back into formal education. Many students appreciate their independent lifetime full of travelling and new experiences so much that often have a hard time to resume schooling. In this case, one would lose a chance to get a degree and build a career. Secondly, study skills may have diminished, making it harder for young people to adjust to life in education. According to research/statistics, students who took a year off after high school get lower marks than the ones who embarked on college after finishing school.
To conclude, even though a year’s break is a good possibility to save finances and gain experience, it still can negatively impact on education by weakening students’ learning skills and their yearning to complete a degree.
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Some students after finishing school decide to take a break from studying before entering college or university, but the issue also has some negative effect. The following paragraphs discuss both advantages and disadvantages of a year’s break and reach a reasonable conclusion.
ReplyDeleteFirstly, a gap year gives the opportunity to have more time for exploring diverse professions or maybe even try to work in the field of interest. It broadens your horizons and also helps you to understand how you want to see yourself in the future. Additionally, whilst doing odd jobs, you have a chance to save more money for the future due to the high cost of education.
Secondly, i would like to write down some words about travelling. Some young adults chose to spend this time investigating the world. If you have money and a gap year for the trip, I suppose, it must be the best way to unwind before university studies. While travelling you can gain lots of life skills and, without any doubt, meet new friends and share experiences.
Nevertheless, there are a few disadvantages too. For instance, sometimes having such a long break can lead to laziness and, finally, refusing to go back into formal education. It’s quite possible, especially after travelling and entertainment. Furthermore, according to the latest research, scientists ended up with the conclusion that students who took a year off after high school get lower marks than the ones who embarked on college after finishing school.
To put it simply, even though a gap year is a good possibility to save finances and gain experience, it still can negatively impact on education. My own view of the matter is that each person decides what personally for him will contribute to the advancement in life both in the education and material terms.
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Some students after finishing school decide to take a break from studying prior to entering college or university, on the contrary the issue also has a number of negative effects. The following paragraphs discuss both advantages and disadvantages of thisperiod and reach a reasonable conclusion. Firstly, a gap year gives the opportunity to have more time for exploring diverse professions or maybe even try to work in the field of interest. It broadens your horizons and in parallel helps you to understand how you want to see yourself in the future. Additionally, whilst doing odd jobs, you have a chance to save more money for the future due to the high cost of education. Secondly, i would like to write down some words about travelling. Some young adults chose to spend this time investigating the world. If you have money and a gap year for the trip, I suppose, it must be the best way to unwind previously university studies. While travelling, you can gain lots of life skills and, without doubt, meet new friends and share experiences. Nevertheless, there are a few drawbacks too. For instance, sometimes having such a long break can lead to laziness and, finally, refusing to go back into formal education. It’s quite possible, especially after travelling and entertainment. Furthermore, according to the latest research, scientists ended up with the conclusion that students who took a year off after high school get lower marks than the ones who embarked on college after finishing school. To put it simply, even though a gap term is a good possibility to save finances and gain experience, it can impact education negatively. My own view of the matter is that each person decides personally what to contribute into the advancement in life both in the educational and material terms.